tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post690594216553498695..comments2023-04-05T05:36:05.156-07:00Comments on Orchards Windows Roses: Portrait of an East Coast SmokestackJoanne Young Elliotthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-40330195086165096842011-07-22T13:03:05.677-07:002011-07-22T13:03:05.677-07:00Thank you bkm.Thank you bkm.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-6887760771270150092011-07-20T17:34:55.525-07:002011-07-20T17:34:55.525-07:00Nice I love that last stanza too...it is a kicker ...Nice I love that last stanza too...it is a kicker but the whole piece flows nicely and with great description ....bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-19557560498440086432011-07-20T10:39:29.242-07:002011-07-20T10:39:29.242-07:00Thank you poemblaze. :-)Thank you poemblaze. :-)Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-78109859653787928082011-07-20T10:28:16.382-07:002011-07-20T10:28:16.382-07:00A delight for the senses! ;-) Well done.A delight for the senses! ;-) Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-83998722921988880052011-07-19T22:52:50.102-07:002011-07-19T22:52:50.102-07:00Thank you Hedgewitch. I appreciate your comments. ...Thank you Hedgewitch. I appreciate your comments. Nick's a great writer isn't he? He's always a fun read.<br /><br />See you around d'Verse or Twitter.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-26521448957396407592011-07-19T16:30:31.998-07:002011-07-19T16:30:31.998-07:00This was a great character study--I really feel li...This was a great character study--I really feel like I watched and listened to the character throughout. The ending was a solid punch, but I think my favorite is "...She knocks ashes to ashes/as the room fills/smoke rising like Spirit/to the ceiling..." That's poetry. <br /><br />I also enjoyed your link to your inspirational phrase--great little short piece about life in Hell(or Las Vegas--about the same to me. ) Great to meet you at dVerse.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-70334518660524846712011-07-19T15:14:37.107-07:002011-07-19T15:14:37.107-07:00Thank you Victoria.Thank you Victoria.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-61181094300094540472011-07-19T14:21:38.971-07:002011-07-19T14:21:38.971-07:00Joanne, this is wonderful. I don't know your p...Joanne, this is wonderful. I don't know your poetry (yet) but the voice is just perfect for the write. VictoriaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-67274183795767898712011-07-19T13:07:28.638-07:002011-07-19T13:07:28.638-07:00Thanks Peter!Thanks Peter!Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-33326951244228416192011-07-19T13:05:58.797-07:002011-07-19T13:05:58.797-07:00Lots of gritty imagery here Joanne. Great! // Pete...Lots of gritty imagery here Joanne. Great! // Peter.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-15872733485077067382011-07-19T13:02:26.683-07:002011-07-19T13:02:26.683-07:00Thanks Natasha and thanks for turning me on to thi...Thanks Natasha and thanks for turning me on to this group.<br /><br />Brian, thank you. I'd love to read it somewhere...may do that this weekend at an open reading. And thank you for conjuring up this group of poets with a great place to hang out.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-46655618257578713312011-07-19T12:39:28.264-07:002011-07-19T12:39:28.264-07:00dang...vicious close...love it...great imagery thr...dang...vicious close...love it...great imagery through out i could def see her...and nice set up too on his pic...love to hear it read...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-76677275470976844502011-07-19T12:30:48.244-07:002011-07-19T12:30:48.244-07:00Joanne! So very happy you joined us for the big li...Joanne! So very happy you joined us for the big link up! This is such a fantastic portrait, the imagery, capturing the essence of the smoke stack! Absolutely love the title...and the piece that followed, AWESOME!Tashtoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15847190224960829574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-613112366235209962011-04-09T11:23:44.544-07:002011-04-09T11:23:44.544-07:00Ah, the amazing intensity of a habit that liked us...Ah, the amazing intensity of a habit that liked us. That came and stayed and never gave notice.(A Rilke sentiment) This is a very well constructed and perceptive poem with a real kick in the final line.James Rainsfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12981399551842327691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-39159038354725396982010-06-29T07:24:44.931-07:002010-06-29T07:24:44.931-07:00Nick,
Thanks!
I'm grateful for the inspirati...Nick,<br /><br />Thanks!<br /><br />I'm grateful for the inspiration. Something clicked in my brain regarding sound when I read your term East Coast smokestack. I really started to get the line ending thing.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-26431984238681992202010-06-28T15:13:11.487-07:002010-06-28T15:13:11.487-07:00I am honored every time I read this great poem. It...I am honored every time I read this great poem. It's way better than that piece I wrote!Nick Belardeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16445719353246891145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-8101839083317331352010-06-22T10:50:28.663-07:002010-06-22T10:50:28.663-07:00Thanks Eric!Thanks Eric!Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-89794802572412547312010-06-22T07:12:35.295-07:002010-06-22T07:12:35.295-07:00Awesome descriptions. I can smell it.Awesome descriptions. I can smell it.EC Holmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06075520519675445961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-91454994320166352842010-06-19T09:33:37.884-07:002010-06-19T09:33:37.884-07:00I like your take on her. She's some strange am...I like your take on her. She's some strange amalgam of my imagination and the real life charcters I've known or met. The term "East Coast smokestack" just triggered her into existence.Joanne Young Elliotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14431836725661024756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-377565675486592482.post-9596870205908462112010-06-18T11:29:58.885-07:002010-06-18T11:29:58.885-07:00I love this one! I'm so glad I get the chance...I love this one! I'm so glad I get the chance to read it over after you read it last week. I love your imagery here. It's so sensuous and dirty. I feel like she's a frustrated gangster's moll, like she always wanted to be one, but was never quite attractive enough.Epicurean Priestesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06108298161149837582noreply@blogger.com