so that it hovers over the lake
as a thin veil of vapor.
The way your light rests on the dial
that then casts shadows on stone.
Time glimpsed as your passage through sky.
The way your rays reach out
stimulate Earth to greening,
urge tendrils to climb towards your light.
The way your winds awaken atoms
that excite the atmosphere into
swirls of living joy.
The way your fusion generates waves
that streak across space
penetrate Earth, move us.
The way your gravitas pulls us
to you. Prevents us from drifting
into that eternal night.
© 2011 Joanne Elliott
nice reflection...on how life is sustained and motivated by our heavenly bodies...and it makes for a great extended metaphor as well...smiles.
ReplyDeleteA beautifully written lyric poem, Joanne. Pleased to make your acquaintance! xxxJenne'
ReplyDeleteI like the gentle pull of nature, the sun nourishing the earth.
ReplyDeleteThese lines are lovely:
The way your winds awaken atoms
that excite the atmosphere into
swirls of living joy.
"The way your light rests on the dial / that then casts shadows on stone" ... very nice write. What a great tribute to the Sun.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Stephen, the whole stanza about the sundial caught my attention.... And the word "gravitas" was a perfect word in a perfect line in the last..... very nice.......
ReplyDeletevery smooth flow.. lovely write!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful write. Felt like a gentle tide.
ReplyDeleteTremendous offering. Really enjoyed the piece a lot, thank you
ReplyDeletethis flowed so smoothly and was such a great poem thanks
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Nice. I love the passage about the sundial.
ReplyDeleteA fine personification of the star that lights our sky with life. Great progression from the small earthly details to the more cosmic ones also. Good stuff.
ReplyDeleteJoanne, a lovely reflection.
ReplyDeleteThe way your winds awaken atoms
ReplyDeletethat excite the atmosphere into
swirls of living joy.
Such poetic perfection!! Absolutely love this poem.
Great resonance.
Lady Nyo
Yes! Thank heaven for her.
ReplyDeleteIt's so clear why we first worshipped the sun, you bring it all to the forefront in your fine poem.
ReplyDeleteIt's beautiful..i cherished reading it from the beginning till the end.
ReplyDeleteAnd your blog's template is very catchy..Nice blog! :)
Alcina
I have such a love affair with the sun, this piece simply sung to me. Beautifully penned my friend! ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteJoanne! Beautiful write that may have come close to converting this moon worshiper! ;)
ReplyDeleteLoved the flow of this piece :)
ReplyDeletelovely poem. very visual.
ReplyDeleteThank you all for your comments. I appreciate you dVerse poets!
ReplyDeleteThis is so lovely, Joanne. I feel like I could really sit with this for awhile to take in all the fabulous lines. Thanks for sharing it with us, and thank you for your wise words over at my place :)
ReplyDeleteI feel like a flower when I seek out the sun and turn my face to it and smile. http://looseleafnotes.com
ReplyDeleteAh such is the sun and the pleasure it brings. Cobversely it can be the herald of death.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
A really nice poem to dedicate to the sun. Thanks for bringing attention to the wonders of life and beauty the sun brings to us.
ReplyDeleteLovely, dear namesake. What a wonderful homage to the sun. I like the indirectness of it, especially:
ReplyDeletegreening,
urge tendrils to climb
Thanks!
"...the way you..."
ReplyDeleteMem'ries...the Way You Were...
Nice relaxing reflections. Thanks!
oh so beautiful - and the last stanza took my breath away..
ReplyDeletevery spiritually uplifting for me - thank you.
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