Frost lingers at the fringes
spoils spring’s potential fruit.
Trees lost through the night
lie dormant, become other
beneath blunt blades
the axe hacks
slices still air
splits open winter
cuts deep into dead wood.
Hope splinters into dust
upon frost firm ground
waits to blend
with forgiving mud
the primordial soup
that waits to feed
the seed yet unborn.
© 2012 Joanne Elliott
Get the trip to the dark side and then more hopeful to the light, nicely done.
ReplyDeletea bit of a fresh take on the circle of life...portrayed rather dramatic as well...dying so the next can live...
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splits open winter - wonderful writing.
Really like how the poem reads. Has it's own rhythm, and it's just brilliant.
Very nice work here.
Enjoyed your approach here--everything recycles,even hope, even buds, everything has its moment, then passes it to the next. Love the short and cadenced couplet form for this, as well.
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the seed yet unborn...i like this much...a sense of beginnings in endings..new life and nourishing hope...beautifully penned
Lovely, life in seasons cycles.
ReplyDeleteI feel the pepper in your season...very much enjoyed this piece.
ReplyDeleteEspecially like the sounds in this one.
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You use the sibiliance of "s" and the dunning of "d" to good effect, too.
Lovely.
I like this. Terrific journey down an alternate symbolism of spring-time meaning. Very nicely done. Thanks
ReplyDeleteA unique perspective into that time that is the in-between of seasons, neither winter anymore nor spring just yet.
ReplyDeleteLovely write !
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry I thought I had commented but apparently I shouldn't try to do that late at night :). I enjoyed how you twisted the expected and delivered such beauty, especially 'Hope splinters into dust'.
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DeleteBeautiful poem! It's vivid imagery kept me feeling with all of my senses.
ReplyDeleteThis is amazingly stunning! The imagery is gorgeously woven, really enjoyed this! :)
ReplyDeleteVery powerful use of metaphor and sound devices. Very nice write. Quirina (http://themindssky.wordpress.com) (Having problems getting Blogger to publish my comment).
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