Sunday, June 27, 2010

The Vacant Lot Next Door

15 comments:

  1. So romantic...I love your imagery; how I can see it all happening. It's sentimental and sweet, but not saccharine. I love it.

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  2. Thanks Chels. My memories are fertile ground for poetry. I like to find the stories and embellish.

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  3. Joanne! I was completely caught up in this moment! I could see it all play out, and as a huge fan of vacant lot softball as a girl, you could have sung to me in a voice any more clear. I have stolen my memories back from this piece...and I thank you for that! Wonderful :)

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  4. You're welcome and thanks Natasha. I didn't play, but was a fan. My brother was the one who couldn't run, but boy could he hit.

    I love mining my memories for ideas. I started doing that more in the past couple of years. Memories make for rich soil to grow poems.

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  5. smiles. you do well with the stories...this one was touching for me and brought out some of my own memories...really a lovely share...

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  6. A very human narrative, with living characters in a coherent world, and description that puts the reader standing next to them. Enjoyed it much.

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  7. Thank you Brian and Joy. I appreciate your comments.

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  8. Tom Eliot:

    This poem just wraps the reader up in its blanket of skillfully described imagery.
    An absolute pleasure to read. A real experience.

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  9. So glad you reposted this and shared this with us.

    You have a gift for telling a lovely story...and those ending lines are very uplifting.

    also, thanks for your kind words in my blog; will check out that book that you mentioned...

    happy day~

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  10. ..the way t'wards the end really touches deep.. i don't think i can write a piece as romantic as yours... lucky you.. you can.. adorable write!(:

    ~Kelvin

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  11. ..it means they're already home...love this closure as it sums up the whole story so perfectly...very nicely played joanne

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  12. Lovely write, coming from a family that lives on the field I felt so connected to this. ~ Rose

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